Sunday, April 3, 2011
One Tree Hill: Full Circle: The Final Copy.
Saturday, April 2, 2011
Phoebe's FanFic - [Completed Draft!!!]
Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean?
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place.
And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.
Wednesday, March 23, 2011
Phoebe's fanfic draft - I love you, Daddy!
Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean?
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place.
And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.
Nick Son
Juliet couldn’t afford to go out of her house because her mother was disturbed by the relationship between Romeo and Juliet. One very dark night; Romeo went to her garden and called her.
“Juliet!” Romeo cried.
Juliet who was with long hair about more than 7 M looked down and smiled after seeing Romeo but she was afraid of her mother's realizing that Romeo was in the garden.
Juliet whispered "Romeo! What are you doing over there? You shouldn’t be here. My mother is sleeping now!"
Romeo replied "I am not patient to miss you so much. That is why I am here."
Both were worrying about her mother's waking up but they wanted to see closer and exactly each faces. Because of the no moon, it was hard to distinguish each others.
Romeo cried "Juliet, please throw down something I can climb up there with. I want to see you closer."
Juliet mumbled "Rope rope rope."
Juliet was looking for such ropes but there were no any such ropes he can climb up with.
She finally realised she already has one such as ropes "Oh!! My hair!"
She threw down her hair to him to climb up.
Romeo whispered "Oh Juliet you are my girl."
He went up but it was not easy to go up in darkness and he was worried her hair would fall out by pulling her hair. At that time, the time was going to almost 12am. When the time reached 12am, Juliet hair changed to 7 dwarf toys chaining behind of each others. Romeo was startled and fell down to garden. He looked up the 7 dwarf toys vacantly for a while. He thought Juliet was cheating on him with the 7 dwarfs. He did't realised the 7 dwarfs are toys. Romeo ran away and wept.
Juliet yelled "Romeo come back! Romeo!" She thought Romeo was astounded due to the toys. She started to get off the toys from her hair.
Romeo got a mind during running to murder her and 7 dwarfs.
"Juliet... I trust you... I loved you... I will kill you and 7 dwarfs!" something like bile was rising in his throat.
Romeo decided to look for a wizard who can create a spell. After asking all around, he finally got a village where a wizard live in. Only one old house was located in it.
Romeo knocked the front door of the house. Romeo was sure the house was what a wizard live in. The door was unlocked so he went in the house and then looked for a wizard.
One wizard was looking at a mirror and turned back to see Romeo. The wizard was giggling.
Romeo said "Great wizard, I need a spell to kill Juliet!!" The wizard looked very old and worn a shabby cape.
"Alright alright, I knew you'd be here. And I have already prepared what you want ha ha ha."
He brought a green apple and gave Romeo.
"You will transform into strong and handsome man if you eat it. Then I will tell you what you have to do next for your revenge. Ha ha ha."
Romeo ate the apple without any indecision. Romeo suddenly fell down on the floor and convulsed then never woke up...
"Ha Ha Ha, I am going to be the most handsome man in the world soon!"
By people who had heard the wizard's saying around of his house the murdering Romeo was widely known. Then Juliet had heard it. She was sobbing. She decided another revenge for Romeo to kill the wizard. Juliet hit the road to look for the wizard first but it was not difficult because the wizard was so notorious for his behaviors.
Finally she caught him up. Rage like splitting pain burst through her head and then she yelled
"You killed Romeo. Now I'm killing you!"
The wizard sobbingly said "Don't you remember me..? It is me... Romeo…"
Juliet replied as surprised "What..? What are you talking about? You are Romeo..? Don't lie! He doesn't look stupid like you!"
The wizard got a miff. "I drank what the wizard gave me. Then I transformed like... like.... this stupid figure.........." He resisted an impulse to take a miff.
She hugged and told him "Oh poor Romeo I have missed you so much. Have you any idea how to transform back into your original figure?"
He talked back as soon as finish her saying. "Kiss!! Your kiss is only the key!!" Juliet was so happy to take a chance kissing him.
"Oh that is what I want Romeo!" Juliet kissed the wizard.
Suddenly the wizard was transforming slowly into young and handsome wizard but it was not definitely Romeo. The young wizard was looking at a mirror not Juliet. He was being impressed about his face. "I.. I am the most handsome man in the world!! And you are the most beautiful girl in the world." and then he turned back to Juliet and told her.
"Will you marry me?"
However, no one was there. Only one frog was crying under the Juliet clothes Juliet worn.
The frog sobbed and said "You are not Romeo.. You are not a man who I love!! You are responsible!!"
The frog ran away of the house then never come back.
The Wizard still had no idea what and why just happened that..
Note: Juliet took a spell (Offering long hair that was made by 7 dwarfs but available up to 12am) attractive Romeo. However, she must kiss with only man she really loved in mind. If not she might transform into a frog.
Wednesday, March 16, 2011
Sophie's Ten FanFic Reviews.

Family_Unties is a story based around Sawyer, the teenage daughter or Peyton and Lucas who
Wednesday, March 9, 2011
Rachel
Reservoir Dogs
Addendum I: Depression
Son of a Preacher Man
The author captures the attention of the reader with the opening sentence, speaking of having a gun held to his head. A curse word thrown in there for the sake of authenticity. This colloquial voice is used throughout the piece. There is a reference to the Neo-Noir film Taxi driver. Not only does this stir imagery for the reader, adding to the mood of the piece, but pays homage to Tarantinos style, who is constantly referencing Noir films. The author goes between the action scene and then flashbacks about his father, a technique also used in Pulp Fiction as it is not presented in a linear structure. Although i do not find this plot particularly interesting I think the author does a very good job of creating interest through the way it is executed. Great use of analogy throughout.
Batman Begins
The Joker goes to McDonalds.
Blade Runner
Replica of Romance
This piece was really moving. I was pulled into it. The first sentence "blessed and cursed with the preternatural aura of a black-and-white movie star" has a Noir feel about it, the use of black and white, and the introduction of a femme fatale. The author then takes the reader through the "alleyways" of labyrinth, giving it a dark mysterious mood. I love how this piece doesn't tell too much, it leaves so much room for ambiguity, and a sense of nostalgia. The author uses adjectives that really conjure up a sad, gentle, and romantic feel. The line 'depth of his weary soul' i found very emotive. The reader doesn't explain much plot, more just sets a mood, and leaves the reader with an image of a two characters drawn together. The author did a good job of creating subtext.
Shutter Island
Boss
Wow the expansive use of metaphor for the first sentence takes the reader right back the movie Shutter Island. "records always spinning round and round-" uses a symbol from the movie and is a great analogy of Laeddis' mental health. The only criticism I would have on this piece, and perhaps this is more personal preference, is that i find it so rich with imagery and analogy that i feel like i need to pull away from the text to take a breath and reflect of what is actually going on as oppose to reading it straight through. This kiss between Lester and Andrew towards the end is a surprising twist. I like how the author explores what is going on from Lester's Point of View.
American Psycho
Very disturbing piece of fan fiction, but that is to be expected given the original material of American Psycho. Patrick Bateman waits in line for the new Harry Potter book. A goth girl questions his place in the line, angered by this Patrick drags her off and to a warehouse and brutally murders her, then returns home to read his Harry Potter. The use of first person point of view to create an unreliable narrator works well for this piece, as it gives direct insight as to what the character is thinking, as "Psycho" does with the use of voice over. This piece is rather graphic and disturbing, but also at time comical, making it interesting to read, but i found the content too disturbing and graphic for my taste.
Scarface
Scarface Forever
Tony Montana goes to hell, where he eventually takes over the throne from the devil. This fan fiction is short and easy to read. The writer uses dialogue, and captures Tony accent with 'fuck you mein', an effective technique to demonstrate authenticity. There seems to be something lacking in this piece, I think it could padded out with description. For example, being set in Hell the author could of used a a lot more imagery to create a scary or haunting setting. I found this fanfic to be very average, the plot is boring. The writing is sufficient to portray the plot but lacks originality and imagery.
Psycho
We Didn't Start the Horror...
This is a song written to the tune of "We Didn't Start the Fire" by Billy Joel.
This song is an original and clever idea. The use of such an uplifting tune for the horror movie "Psycho", provides refreshingly dark humour. It explains much of the plot and shows an impressive use of rhythm and rhyme as well as symbology, which pays homage to a film so rich in symbols. Is is a creative idea.
Fight Club

Friday, March 4, 2011
Nick
Most of people tend to not understand theme of the original Cats because there is no any dialogue. Dancing and singing are only way to catch the theme from. However, in this fan-fiction, cats make conversations in English and it is written easily to understand for people. Moreover, two naïve and lovely kits are appeared to compete on a male cat the kits fall in love. They are jealous of his behaviors and growl to each others. You can catch how cute and lovely they are on it! However, appearing more characters and competitions will make it more interesting I assume Fiction that is about Jesus and Mary has not been created enough so far. So I chose this fiction! This fiction is when Jesus is on the hill and he was tortured. And title of this fiction is “Not ready” which means Mary is not ready let Jesus die. She had said “I am not ready” many time. I think Mary is captured very well. When you read it you can feel what she had felt.. .
10. Miss Saigon
Its story is about love between Tom and his mom who has looked after Tom does not give birth to him. He realised it when he is sixteenth. It is not explained how he realised the truth. Hence, he started to yell to them. His mother merely said "I'm sorry, I'm responsible" and sobbed. However, he was not upset to her to his father. Tom said "Why didn't you tell me?" and "You didn't love my mother!!" I thought he tried to say about his mother who gave birth to him but he did to say about his mother who has care of him. It is really sad and touching story.














