Time Traveler's Wife, have you ever read or watched it? - Yes, I have.
Actually I cried a lot at the end of the movie. lol
The Time Traveler's Wife is a 2009 film based on Audrey Niffenegger's 2003 novel of the same name. Directed by Robert Schwentke, the film stars Eric Bana as Henry DeTamble, a Chicago librarian with a genetic disorder that causes him to time travel randomly as he tries to build a romantic relationship with his love Clare, played by Rachel McAdams. (Wikipedia, 2011)
In this movie, there is a girl who is Henry and Clare's daughter, Alba.
I am going to show my own story, which is based on Alba. And also this story will be not much different with original story because it is based on original story.
I love you, Daddy!
My name is Alba.
I am a time-traveler like Henry, who was my dad.
It has been a long time since my dad died.
At the Christmas when I was 5, he went to a time travel; but unfortunately he was gunned down by my grandfather during that travelling. Grandpa was hunting when dad arrived there, and he confused with a deer. Actually, I was there when he was shot - I've already known that when and how he would die - and I tried to stop his death, but I couldn't.
Even now, I often go to that time to prevent the death of dad. However, it cannot be changed; because it is his time, and his fate.
Anyway, I became 19 years old now - yes, I became a lady.
Mom and Dr.Kendrick say I should be supposed to stop time-travelling because it will cause something bad to me like dad's death, and it will occur many troubles in others' lives. They may be right and I know about it pretty much than they say, so I think there will be no happen. Everything will be okay.
I couldn’t see dad from I was 10. At that time, I was on a school trip on the zoo; and also I'd already known he would be there. How had I known? I'm a time-traveler; and so I can go to any place of any time to see what happens that time whenever I want to. That's how I had known it already.
Does it sound like a kidding? - No! It is a truth.
We - dad and I - are not able to go too far distant future. I tried to go to the future after 20 years, but I couldn't.
Although dad is not here anymore, I am fine because I can go to see him whenever I want to; but my mom seems not to be. She is still waiting for him.
Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean?
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place.
Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean?
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place.
And you know?
The most important thing, which is also unlike my dad, is that I can bring my clothes during I am on a time-travel!!! Henry said he couldn't bring his clothes, so he was always being naked during he was on a travel. I don't know why I can bring them - just I guess it is a kind of God's concern for the little girl! Even he taught me how to open locked doors to get clothes, but I don't need the skill.
Since I was younger - I'm still young -, I've often asked my friends or others "If you have an ability which can bring you in any time and place. Also you can pick up the specific time and place. How will you feel like? What do you think?" And always the answers are "It's unbelievable! How amazing it is? I will do anything if I can get that kind of ability. Also if I have that kind of ability ...." As you see, they desire the ability because, as my mum says, God creates all human beings without this kind of potential. Yes, I agree with her. Time-travel is a part of God's ability, not human's. Only God can control the time.
And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.
And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.
Actually, Dr. Kendrick says it is not ability or something; it is a disease. According to him, it is a kind of an error because of genetic disorder. He has been trying to find how to rearrage these genes since he met Henry. Finally, he found the treatment.
Yes, so...
Because of that reason, today will be my last time-travel day. After this travel, sad to say, I cannot see dad anymore. In fact, dad often disappeared without any expecting so that I couldn't spent much the real time with him when he was alive. It was so, but I have spent most of my time with watching dad behind via time-travel.
There will be no more valuable word than 'dad' in my rest life. Yes, it have to be, and should be.
It would be sufficient.
It is time to go. This is last time, and last chance to see him.
Good bye, daddy.
And please do not forget that I love you so much, dad.
I love you, daddy.
See you again someday if we can find each other.
I love you, daddy..






Finally, You upload final draft! Congratulations :) as I am not an English native speaker.. I cannot edit your grammar or vocabs errors..
ReplyDelete(sorry for this)
while I am reading this I was totally absorbed in your story. also, your pictures and coloured words were add visual interest. Asyour story is in first-person, and it told simply, in a way that makes it both easy and entertaining to read. Someone might not like simple sentences but I like it!
And last part was sad..I miss my daddy as well!! Anyway, Great Job.well done!
thank you for comment :)
ReplyDeleteactually my english level is toooooo low I couldn't make long sentence lol...
Thank you for reading, Min :)
oh no.. have you read my story? My english is worse than you!! lol
ReplyDeletebut your simple sentenses make your story better I think :) great job again :)
And also I am not sure but, you should check about "articles" a or the.
ReplyDeletefor example,
It is time to go. This is last time, and last chance to see him.
what about,
This is the last time?
..I also have problems with article..as well.
Hey!
ReplyDeleteLove the development your piece went through with your added ending. It's a lovely simple, sentimental story. The concept is awesome.
Also enjoying the first person p.o.v narration.
a couple of edits:
Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain. change to "Someone once said to me: No pain, no gain".
also.
Anyway, I became 19 years old now - yes, I became a lady.
Mom and Dr.Kendrick say I should be supposed to stop time-travelling because it will cause something bad to me like dad's death, and it will occur many troubles in others' lives. They may be right and I know about it pretty much than they say, so I think there will be no happen. Everything will be okay
Change to: I am 19 years old now, yes I became a lady.
Mom and Dr K say I should stop time-traveling now because it could cause something bad to happen to me, like dad's death, and it will create more trouble in others' lives. They may be right. I know about the chances, so I don't think it will happen.
actually, it just occurred to me that you don't have any person to person dialogue in there.... but not sure how you would work it in...