One Tree Hill: Full Circle: The Final Copy.

The crisp air whipped its way along the riverbank as darkness fell upon the land. Despite the cold, Haley was determined not to be put off. She was there to put on the proud-mama act. Her eldest son Jamie was the team's star player. The years and years were all about to come to fruition. Yet everything was not quite as it seemed.

The morning had started out just as any other typical day in the life of the Scotts'.

"Jamie! How many times have I told you to get up," Haley shrieked through the door of her teenage son's room.

"It's quarter to eight, if you don't get up now, you'll be late for school, and you know the consequence of that," she continued as she walked away.

All that could be heard in reply was a loud, monotone groan as Jamie rolled out of bed.

Brushing his way out of his room, Jamie slumped down the stairs and into a seat at the breakfast-laden kitchen table.

"Well good-morning to you too," Haley spritely said as she joined Jamie at the table.

Filled with good food, Jamie was a much more agreeable person, although still somewhat rarely-spoken. He had always been a studious student through elementary school. This was of course testament to his mother's character and her intense dedication to the education of her son. However having grown up and started high school while becoming more involved with his sporting activities, Jamie had begun to mirror his father's exact character at the same age.

Having finished breakfast in silence, Jamie left for school saying "Well I'm off now, hope you have a good day and get some work done, love you mum."

"Love you too son, see you at the game tonight," Haley replied as she moved to the door watching her son walk down the road.

With the peace and quiet of the house to herself, she sat down at her piano to work on her latest song. It all seemed like a life time ago that at the age of her own son, Haley had been given the opportunity to have a career as a singer-songwriter, and now years later here she was back again writing songs for upcoming musicians.

Outside of her song-writing career, she had also found herself involved in book-editing and tutoring. They were all passions of her sixteen year-old-self. She had taken on the editing of books written by her good friend, and brother-in-law Lucas Scott. The two had grown up together as best friends bound by a shared love for literature. It was also this passion and understanding for literature that pushed Haley into tutoring of other students in English as a high schooler. It was through tutoring that Haley had met, gotten to know and fallen in love with her best friend's younger step-brother, Nathan.

It was while immersed in composing that the knock on the door came. Nothing could have prepared her for it, nothing at all.

Having run from the back study, Haley found herself out of breath. She stopped for the briefest of times to glance out the window, and noticed the unmistakeable car. Her legs weakened as she opened the door.

"Good morning Mrs James-Scott, I'm Constable David Fin, unfortunately I've come to inform you of an incident that occurred this morning."

"Ah I see," Haley murmured as her heart sunk and mind swirled off imagining all the possibilities.

"This morning on his way to school it appears Jamie was ambushed by a group from behind," the Constable said.

"Is he okay?" Haley stammered, attempting to choke back the tears that were beginning to well in her eyes.

"Well, that is somewhat the good news here, Haley. Jamie was lucky that there were witnesses nearby who rushed to his aid," Constable David continued.

"Yes, but is he actually okay? Where is he? Any Damage? Where's my baby?" Haley burst out getting more and more upset and desperate for answers with each question.

"Jamie is doing fine Haley, he was lucky the attack was interrupted otherwise he would be in a worse condition. He is at the local hospital and for any further information you will need to see the doctors there," Constable David calmly said.

"Thank you Constable," Haley replied in a calmer more relieved tone.

"If you would like, I can drive you to the hospital now. We would like to speak with him and discuss whether or not to press charges," Constable David offered with a genuinely concerned tone.

"That would be great thanks actually, and dependent on what Jamie says, I think charges will be laid," Haley accepted the lift with an appreciative tone.

Surprisingly unscathed, Jamie emerged from the hospital covered with numerous bruises around his body and surface scratches, but no broken bones or ribs. He was relieved to be able to take to the basketball court that night. The opportunity to play the biggest game of his life was too much to pass up, especially since it had so much depending on it.

Phoebe's FanFic - [Completed Draft!!!]

  

Completed! Thank you, everybody! :)
Do feel free to give any comment or adivice :)

 

Time Traveler's Wife, have you ever read or watched it? - Yes, I have.

Actually I cried a lot at the end of the movie. lol

The Time Traveler's Wife is a 2009 film based on Audrey Niffenegger's 2003 novel of the same name. Directed by Robert Schwentke, the film stars Eric Bana as Henry DeTamble, a Chicago librarian with a genetic disorder that causes him to time travel randomly as he tries to build a romantic relationship with his love Clare, played by Rachel McAdams. (Wikipedia, 2011)

In this movie, there is a girl who is Henry and Clare's daughter, Alba.

I am going to show my own story, which is based on Alba. And also this story will be not much different with original story because it is based on original story.

I love you, Daddy!

My name is Alba.

I am a time-traveler like Henry, who was my dad.

It has been a long time since my dad died. 

At the Christmas when I was 5, he went to a time travel; but unfortunately he was gunned down by my grandfather during that travelling. Grandpa was hunting when dad arrived there, and he confused with a deer. Actually, I was there when he was shot - I've already known that when and how he would die - and I tried to stop his death, but I couldn't.

Even now, I often go to that time to prevent the death of dad. However, it cannot be changed; because it is his time, and his fate.

Anyway, I became 19 years old now - yes, I became a lady.

Mom and Dr.Kendrick say I should be supposed to stop time-travelling because it will cause something bad to me like dad's death, and it will occur many troubles in others' lives. They may be right and I know about it pretty much than they say, so I think there will be no happen. Everything will be okay.

I couldn’t see dad from I was 10. At that time, I was on a school trip on the zoo; and also I'd already known he would be there. How had I known? I'm a time-traveler; and so I can go to any place of any time to see what happens that time whenever I want to. That's how I had known it already.

Does it sound like a kidding? - No! It is a truth.

We - dad and I - are not able to go too far distant future. I tried to go to the future after 20 years, but I couldn't.

Although dad is not here anymore, I am fine because I can go to see him whenever I want to; but my mom seems not to be. She is still waiting for him.


Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean? 
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place. 

And you know? 

The most important thing, which is also unlike my dad, is that I can bring my clothes during I am on a time-travel!!! Henry said he couldn't bring his clothes, so he was always being naked during he was on a travel. I don't know why I can bring them - just I guess it is a kind of God's concern for the little girl! Even he taught me how to open locked doors to get clothes, but I don't need the skill.

Since I was younger - I'm still young -, I've often asked my friends or others "If you have an ability which can bring you in any time and place. Also you can pick up the specific time and place. How will you feel like? What do you think?" And always the answers are "It's unbelievable! How amazing it is? I will do anything if I can get that kind of ability. Also if I have that kind of ability ...." As you see, they desire the ability because, as my mum says, God creates all human beings without this kind of potential. Yes, I agree with her. Time-travel is a part of God's ability, not human's. Only God can control the time.  

And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.

Actually, Dr. Kendrick says it is not ability or something; it is a disease. According to him, it is a kind of an error because of genetic disorder. He has been trying to find how to rearrage these genes since he met Henry. Finally, he found the treatment.

Yes, so...

Because of that reason, today will be my last time-travel day. After this travel, sad to say, I cannot see dad anymore. In fact, dad often disappeared without any expecting so that I couldn't spent much the real time with him when he was alive. It was so, but I have spent most of my time with watching dad behind via time-travel.

There will be no more valuable word than 'dad' in my rest life. Yes, it have to be, and should be.

It would be sufficient.

It is time to go. This is last time, and last chance to see him.

Good bye, daddy.

And please do not forget that I love you so much, dad.

I love you, daddy.

See you again someday if we can find each other.

I love you, daddy..

Based on the movie Scarface. Tony Montana doesn’t get shot at the end of Scarface. He ends up shooting all the gang and getting away with it. 20 years later he is a retired drug lord. However he becomes a little too relaxed about his drug taking; he gets caught using cocaine at a resort. He has to attend rehab as part of his rehabilitation, where he meets another interesting character. Charlie Sheen. 

They sit in a dull, grey room, on generic fold out chairs. Some of them looking around at each other, trying to catch some sort of unspoken connection.  Some of them look down, anxiously, shuffling their feet, and awkwardly repositioning their arms. 

“Tony why don't you introduce yourself to the group?”

Tony stands up. He’s short but he has that small man, big ego persona. Like a little bulldog bred for fighting.  

“This guy can’t be serious; he must be trying to fuck with me.  He thinks he is a somebody. I tell you he aint a nobody.” He spits with a thick Cuban accent. “ This is not how I, Tony Montana, is supposed  to be going down,  sitting around with a bunch of fucks in this shit hole. Who the fuck is the slimy pseudo-shrink, telling me I have a problem.  Me, Tony Montana has a problem?” He pauses, the violently gestures to the counsellor. “I’ll show him what a fucking probliem is. Why i am here today? Cause Im Tony Montana and I live my fucking life and mine my own fucking business.  What he want me to do? Cry because I lost my family, sob like a little fucking girl! I ain’t need nobody my whole life. I aint got a problem.” He sits back down and mumbles “Actually I do got a problem, my problem is I ain’t got no fucking yeyo.”

He looks around for some sort of reaction, but the counsellor only gives a smug smile. Tony looks to the man next to him. He has a pink pigment to his skin and is wearing a bucket hat. He has deep set wrinkles under his strung out eyes.

“Would you like to introduce yourself to the group?”

He lights his cigarette before he clears his throat. He speaks fast, as if there is no bottleneck slowing down the process between his thoughts and his dialogue. 

“ Hahaha, I think we all know who I am right, I mean we all know I’m a rock star, shaman, voodoo, warrior.” (With this he does some sort of odd hand gesture, resembling spirit fingers).   “Enlightening the commoners. Why don't you tell us who you are?” He asks with a scary intensity, before shrugging his shoulders, “You know what I mean though right?”. He then stares at the counsellor, waiting for some sort of reaction.  

Tony looks across to this guy, some Hollywood actor chump who looks like he has been hitting it hard for the last decade.  He looks like he might be on something, although Tony has no idea how he would have snuck it into rehab. He had tried himself but with the security entering this centre, he may as well have been trying to sneak a bomb onto Air Force One. 

The rest of the group go around introducing themselves to each other.  “Blah blah, my journey started when I was a little boy… and my father left…” 

The only thing Tony was interested in was whether or not he could score anything off this Charlie guy who seemed to be pranging out like a maniac. Laughing at the other patients as they revealed up the ghosts from their pasts. 

This process seemed to drag on and on. 

Later on when they are outside Tony goes to sit with Charlie to have a cigarette. 

“Hey what’s the deal with you man? You got something I can score, you know a little coke? I got some cash man; don't worry about the money.  If you can sort out something I will not worry about the price, me, I just need some fucking yeyo to handle this shit”

“Are you serious man? Do I have any drugs? I am a drug.  I’m Charlie sheen, you couldn't handle this” He gestures at himself. “It’s too much for other people man, they don't understand I’m different, I have a different brain, my thoughts are drugs.   I’m on a drug called the truth. It’s like a beautiful potion that only I can live on. I’m like a tiger taking on the mind of a dragon, breathing fire in my heart.”

“I ain’t talking to you; you are crazy, fucked in the head like the rest of these fuckers.”

Tony put his head in hands. 

“ Tony Montana man. TONY MONTANA.”

Phoebe's fanfic draft - I love you, Daddy!

  

not completed yet,

 

Time Traveler's Wife, have you ever read or watched it? - Yes, I have.

Actually I cried a lot at the end of the movie. lol

The Time Traveler's Wife is a 2009 film based on Audrey Niffenegger's 2003 novel of the same name. Directed by Robert Schwentke, the film stars Eric Bana as Henry DeTamble, a Chicago librarian with a genetic disorder that causes him to time travel randomly as he tries to build a romantic relationship with his love Clare, played by Rachel McAdams. (Wikipedia, 2011)

In this movie, there is a girl who is Henry and Clare's daughter, Alba.

I am going to show my own story, which is based on Alba. And also this story will be not much different with original story because it is based on original story.

I love you, Daddy!

My name is Alba.

I am a time-traveler like Henry, who was my dad.

It went by a long time since my dad died. 

At the Christmas when I was 5, he went to a time travel; but unfortunately he was gunned down by my grandfather during that travelling. Grandpa was hunting when dad arrived there, and he confused with a deer. Actually, I was there when he was shot - I've already known that when and how he would die - and I tried to stop his death, but I couldn't.

Even now, I often go to that time to prevent the death of dad. However, it cannot be changed; because it is his time, and his fate.

Anyway, I am 19 years old now - yes, I became a lady.

Mom and Dr.Kendrick say I should be supposed to stop time-travelling because it will cause something bad to me like dad's death, and it will occur many troubles in others' lives. They may be right and I know about it pretty much than they know, so I think there will be no happen. Everything will be okay.

I couldn’t see dad from I was 10. At that time, I was on a school trip on the zoo; and also I'd already known he would be there. How had I known? I'm a time-traveler; and so I can go to any place of any time to see what happens that time whenever I want to. That's how I had known it already.

Does it sound like a kidding? - No! It is a truth.

We - dad and I - are not able to go too far distant future. I tried to go to the future after 20 years, but I couldn't.

Although dad is not here anymore, I am fine because I can go to see him whenever I want to; but my mom seems not to be. She is still waiting for him.


Unlike dad, I can control my ability. Do you understand what does it mean? 
It means that I can choose the time and the place whenever and wherever I want to go.
My dad, Henry, had no choice of travel time and place. 

And you know? 

The most important thing, which is also unlike my dad, is that I can bring my clothes during I am on a time-travel!!! Henry said he couldn't bring his clothes, so he was always being naked during he was on a travel. I don't know why I can bring them - just I guess it is a kind of God's concern for the little girl! Even he taught me how to open locked doors to get clothes, but I don't need the skill.

Since I was younger - I'm still young -, I've often asked my friends or others "If you have an ability which can bring you in any time and place. Also you can pick up the specific time and place. How will you feel like? What do you think?" And always the answers are "It's unbelievable! How amazing it is? I will do anything if I can get that kind of ability. Also if I have that kind of ability ...." As you see, they desire the ability because, as my mum says, God creates all human beings without this kind of potential. Yes, I agree with her. Time-travel is a part of God's ability, not human's. Only God can control the time.  

And you know? The worst disadvantage of time-travelers is that they cannot change thier future; because, for example, I can see my only one and clear future when I am on time-travelling to the future. Most people who are non-timetraveler, during their lives, can change their future depending on how they persevere in their efforts. Someday who said to me this: No pain, no gain.

 

Nick Son

My fan fiction will be focused on Romeo and Juliet. Moreover, several stories will be mixed with it. Your might not catch the theme of this story because many errors of grammar and words.. If is there any errors please comments then I wll fix it!! The several stories mixed are The Cinderella, the Snow white and 7dwarfs and the Rapunzel.



Juliet couldn’t afford to go out of her house because her mother was disturbed by the relationship between Romeo and Juliet. One very dark night; Romeo went to her garden and called her.

“Juliet!” Romeo cried.

Juliet who was with long hair about more than 7 M looked down and smiled after seeing Romeo but she was afraid of her mother's realizing that Romeo was in the garden.

Juliet whispered "Romeo! What are you doing over there? You shouldn’t be here. My mother is sleeping now!"

Romeo replied "I am not patient to miss you so much. That is why I am here."

Both were worrying about her mother's waking up but they wanted to see closer and exactly each faces. Because of the no moon, it was hard to distinguish each others.

Romeo cried "Juliet, please throw down something I can climb up there with. I want to see you closer."

Juliet mumbled "Rope rope rope."
Juliet was looking for such ropes but there were no any such ropes he can climb up with.
She finally realised she already has one such as ropes "Oh!! My hair!"

She threw down her hair to him to climb up.

Romeo whispered "Oh Juliet you are my girl."

He went up but it was not easy to go up in darkness and he was worried her hair would fall out by pulling her hair. At that time, the time was going to almost 12am. When the time reached 12am, Juliet hair changed to 7 dwarf toys chaining behind of each others. Romeo was startled and fell down to garden. He looked up the 7 dwarf toys vacantly for a while. He thought Juliet was cheating on him with the 7 dwarfs. He did't realised the 7 dwarfs are toys. Romeo ran away and wept.

Juliet yelled "Romeo come back! Romeo!" She thought Romeo was astounded due to the toys. She started to get off the toys from her hair.
Romeo got a mind during running to murder her and 7 dwarfs.
"Juliet... I trust you... I loved you... I will kill you and 7 dwarfs!" something like bile was rising in his throat.

Romeo decided to look for a wizard who can create a spell. After asking all around, he finally got a village where a wizard live in. Only one old house was located in it.
Romeo knocked the front door of the house. Romeo was sure the house was what a wizard live in. The door was unlocked so he went in the house and then looked for a wizard.
One wizard was looking at a mirror and turned back to see Romeo. The wizard was giggling.

Romeo said "Great wizard, I need a spell to kill Juliet!!" The wizard looked very old and worn a shabby cape.

"Alright alright, I knew you'd be here. And I have already prepared what you want ha ha ha."
He brought a green apple and gave Romeo.
"You will transform into strong and handsome man if you eat it. Then I will tell you what you have to do next for your revenge. Ha ha ha."

Romeo ate the apple without any indecision. Romeo suddenly fell down on the floor and convulsed then never woke up...

"Ha Ha Ha, I am going to be the most handsome man in the world soon!"
By people who had heard the wizard's saying around of his house the murdering Romeo was widely known. Then Juliet had heard it. She was sobbing. She decided another revenge for Romeo to kill the wizard. Juliet hit the road to look for the wizard first but it was not difficult because the wizard was so notorious for his behaviors.

Finally she caught him up. Rage like splitting pain burst through her head and then she yelled

"You killed Romeo. Now I'm killing you!"

The wizard sobbingly said "Don't you remember me..? It is me... Romeo…"

Juliet replied as surprised "What..? What are you talking about? You are Romeo..? Don't lie! He doesn't look stupid like you!"

The wizard got a miff. "I drank what the wizard gave me. Then I transformed like... like.... this stupid figure.........." He resisted an impulse to take a miff.

She hugged and told him "Oh poor Romeo I have missed you so much. Have you any idea how to transform back into your original figure?"

He talked back as soon as finish her saying. "Kiss!! Your kiss is only the key!!" Juliet was so happy to take a chance kissing him.

"Oh that is what I want Romeo!" Juliet kissed the wizard.

Suddenly the wizard was transforming slowly into young and handsome wizard but it was not definitely Romeo. The young wizard was looking at a mirror not Juliet. He was being impressed about his face. "I.. I am the most handsome man in the world!! And you are the most beautiful girl in the world." and then he turned back to Juliet and told her.

"Will you marry me?"

However, no one was there. Only one frog was crying under the Juliet clothes Juliet worn.

The frog sobbed and said "You are not Romeo.. You are not a man who I love!! You are responsible!!"

The frog ran away of the house then never come back.

The Wizard still had no idea what and why just happened that..

Note: Juliet took a spell (Offering long hair that was made by 7 dwarfs but available up to 12am) attractive Romeo. However, she must kiss with only man she really loved in mind. If not she might transform into a frog.

Sophie's Ten FanFic Reviews.

I decided to focus on One Tree Hill fanfics. Being in it's 8th season, there are numerous characters and plotlines that can be covered through ten different fanfics.

The first I came across was a nineteen chapter story based on the relationship between Haley

James and Nathan Scott that begins in the first season and carries through the series with many

ups and downs. Naley_The_rewrite is written in third person p.o.v. Beginning with a prologue allowed the author to provide the background of how the pair met before moving further along the timeline of their relationship in the first chapter. I found that it was a well written interpretation of the pair's relationship, however at times I felt that the voice of Nathan's thoughts was not quite as accurately interpreted as it could have been considering his character's personality and background. It was interesting to read in third person p.o.v as a large majority of the series episodes are narrated by one of the main characters in first person p.o.v. With 19 chapters, it's a tale of young love and the the many trials they face from young marriage, teen pregnancy and the numerous unsuccessful attempts of female admirers to tempt Nathan to cheat on Haley which leave him constantly having to explain himself to her. This is portrayed through the heavy use of dialogue which provides an insight into where each character is coming from and is an easy way to progress through the story. The language used fits in well with the youth of the characters. There is however a fair amount of spelling and grammar mistakes.

Brooke and Peyton is a different take on the school formal night in season four where the two

best friends face a psychotic stalker. This is a well written fanfic with extensive use of graphic descriptive language that pulls the reader into the story. The language used also allows the reader to get an insight into the strong friendship between the two, and how well they really know each other. It provides an effective window into the character of Brooke Davis. Written in third person p.o.v, the narration allows for the story to not be subjective of one characters p.o.v and therefore is more thrilling.

Win_in_Rome This piece appears not to be related to any actual plotlines of the television series,

and uses only three of the characters- Nathan, Lucas and Hayley. It seems to be a follow

on from another story the fanfic author created, however I was unable to find this. From what I picked up through the dialogue, a new character Angie has been introduced to the story and may be in a romantic relationship with Nathan- this hoewever is never clearly expressed. The

introduction of the story appears to be a re-cap of some sort of trip, however it then jumps to a dance contest. This jump in narration is abrupt, and leaves the reader confused, thinking "did I miss something, where did this come from?". There is also the introduction of Justin Timberlake as a new character, however it isn't until further into the story that you discover how he is related. Then there is the idea given that Nathan and his brother Lucas are living together, yet hate each other, which isn't quite in accordance to the television plotlines, and done so without giving any form of explanataion as to why the two dislike each other. Basically, what ensues is a trip for four to Italy, which is taken by Angie, Nathan, Lucas and a mystery guest who turns out to be good friend of the brothers, Hayley James. In Italy, the group happen to meet a 'music icon of Italy' - Jezzabella, while Angie in turn is a 'music icon of America'. From here I detected what may have been somewhat of a cross-over with the Lizzie Maguire movie which also was set in Italy. The crossover then strengthens where Jezzabella tells Angie that she is supposed to sing a duet at the International Music Awards, but that her partner pulled out, and then goes on to offer the part to Angie. I found the use of the phrase 'Music Icon' strange and would have used Popstar or Singer instead. There was then the introduction ofAngie's identical cousin Chloe, which I found odd considering that you don't hear of identical cousins. Through the majority of this fanfic, one major problem for me was the extent of poor grammar and spelling as well as the chopping between tenses and confusing timeline structure. Furthermore there was a lack of character development which meant character's were generally weak. Despite these problems however, I found the story an enjoyable one to read purely on the plotline which was decipherable.

Death_Row is a piece that focuses around the relationship Jamie Scott has with his mum Haley.

It opens with a flashback to happy times of Jamie's 5th birthday, where his parents are so proud of their son, yet can't believe how time has flown by. From there it skips to the present, where the setting of a prison scene is portrayed through simple descriptive language and a dialogue sequence. There are quite a number of spelling errors which are hard to pass by. The author keeps you reading to the third chapter by slowly introducing secondary characters in order to keep the plot-line moving towards the revelation of what actually occurred between the childhood flashback and the opening prison scene. Although you are kept wondering what actually led to Jamie being put into jail, due to the simple language and use of third person point of view the intensity of the suspense is low.

The_Phone_Call is a typically girly chick-lit fan-fiction narrated in third person. The setup is straight to the point, yet slightly boring as it gives a lot of in-depth background detail in straight, simple sentences. The setting is a girly sleepover. Each of the girls admit to liking a certain boy, where upon the girl closest to that particular boy takes it upon themselves to phone the boy and get it out of them that the girl's feelings were reciprocated without making it obvious that there is an audience to the phone call. The idea of the story is simple and clever, one which many a girl could relate to in some way, without it being overly cliche. Although clever in idea, the execution is somewhat childish in language use, with a few spelling errors.

Wonderwall This piece has a good, but somewhat confusing setup. The idea is good, but the paragraph structure in regards to sentence order is confusing. It uses a lot of short

sentences, which would be the authors attempt at creating tension, this could have been further aided with the addition of a few longer sentences. There was also a few sentence structure errors, and in one paragraph there was a fair bit of repetition of the pronouns 'He' and 'Her'. The piece itself focuses around a hospital scene as a spin-off from the school shooting/hostage scene in Season Three. It centers around Lucas' somewhat platonic, but deep and meaningful close friendship with Peyton who lies injured in the hospital while his girlfriend Brooke stands by providing her support. A large part of the story depicts the impact the shooting of his uncle/ surrogate father Keith has on Luke, plus the loss he is feeling. This is portrayed as the strong emotional link that draws Lucas to Peyton at this time.

Family_Unties is a story based around Sawyer, the teenage daughter or Peyton and Lucas who

married and moved to New York. The plot-line of the story follows Sawyer being sent back to Tree Hill to live with her aunt Haley and uncle Nathan and attend Tree Hill High. It focusses around her return to the area and her first day at high school, in particular her first class, which happens to be gym. The story is setup well introducing the situation, and providing the reason for her move. In the final chapter, there is some discussion on how the situation affected her parents. It is an interesting read with clear links back to the original show with regards to characters such as Coach Skills Taylor, and Brooke Davis as well as references to particularly recognisable 'Scott' or 'Peyton Sawyer' characteristics. However, once again the maturity of this piece is questionable due to some of the language used, and the sentence structure. This however could have been done to provide the 'stroppy teenager' tone of voice to the passage that is portrayed through the first-person narration by Sawyer Scott.

The brothership of Nathan and Lucas Scott and the relationship with their respective sons

forms the platform for the story Lucas_and_Nathans_Guide_to_Babysitting. In an interesting

and well-thought layout, the story is told through the use of rules, with each new part of the story being a new rule or lesson learnt.Lucas and Nathan are left to look after their sons while their wives go out for the night, but although confident everything will go well, the brothers soon learn that their evening is not going to go right at all. It's a light-hearted story lovingly showing the brotherly relationship as they act together to put the wrongs right, and their sons to bed. It's a typical boys story which is pushed through the language used and the events of the evening, which are typical male activities. Definitely was one of my favourites.

A heart-felt piece written on the relationship of Nathan and his son Jamie is Unlikely_Miracle

which focusses on a life lesson Nathan teaches Jamie. The life lesson is about calling people 'retard' and how although someone may not be as 'normal' as you or I, doesn't mean that they can't achieve amazing feats. This is personified through Nathan introducing Jamie to a young autistic man who as a teenager playing high school basketball was able to shot 20 points in 4 minutes, which was an act no one ever thought possible for him to achieve. It is an emotional piece written in third person point of view and making use of flashbacks to tell the story.

A piece which focuses on the friendship Nathan has with Brooke when he provides some comfort

and support is Goodbye_To_You. Brooke's relationship with Lucas has come to an end when he

chooses to break up with Brooke and date her now ex-best friend Peyton. Nathan has been left behind by Haley who decides to go on tour with a famous musician. Together the two of them decide to run away from Tree Hill and end up in California for the summer making a few new friends. Thrroughout their time away, Peyton and Lucas split up numerous times, each contacting Brooke over and over again trying to get her to go home so they can make it up to her individually. It's a tale of taking time for yourself, a bit of self-discovery and the strengthening of friendships which may have been placed on a low pedestal below other more significant relationships. Like most of the other fanfictions there were spelling and grammar errors. While having some good thoughts and somewhat interesting idea, the story is a bit flat, and feels slightly desperate and uninspirational.

Rachel

I am reviewing fan fiction from Film-Noir and Noir inspired cinema.

Reservoir Dogs

Addendum I: Depression

 

 The piece starts off with a, "beep", "beep" ,"beep", representing a heart monitor, which appears throughout the piece. It takes the reader into the characters setting. The author also uses groups of short sentences to add to this effect, working with the beat of the monitor. The author uses very dramatic language, speaking of conscientiousness and awareness with such passion that and I really got the sense that this character is waking up from a near death experience. I like the way this piece ends. On the verge of the character opening his eyes. Its open ended and leaves the me wanting to know, what next?

Pulp Fiction

Son of a Preacher Man

The author captures the attention of the reader with the opening sentence, speaking of having a gun held to his head. A curse word thrown in there for the sake of authenticity. This colloquial voice is used throughout the piece. There is a reference to the Neo-Noir film Taxi driver. Not only does this stir imagery for the reader, adding to the mood of the piece, but pays homage to Tarantinos style, who is constantly referencing Noir films. The author goes between the action scene and then flashbacks about his father, a technique also used in Pulp Fiction as it is not presented in a linear structure. Although i do not find this plot particularly interesting I think the author does a very good job of creating interest through the way it is executed. Great use of analogy throughout. 

Batman Begins

 The Joker goes to McDonalds.

This find the format of this fan fiction a little bit odd. I don't really see why the author chose to insert line breaks and paragraph in the way they did. The writer does depict the way the joker speaks with the constant use or "err..." which i think works well. There are passages in this entry that are quite funny, they must of required a lot of creativity to to come up with. The author goes between humor and horror, the contrast of this is effective. I like the use of the 1st person point of view and the cynical, sarcastic tone of the narrator, it fuels interest into the piece. I found the ratio between dialogue and description worked well for me in that it was easy to read through without pulling away from the text.

Blade Runner 

Replica of Romance

This piece was really moving. I was pulled into it. The first sentence "blessed and cursed with the preternatural aura of a black-and-white movie star" has a Noir feel about it, the use of black and white, and the introduction of a femme fatale. The author then takes the reader through the "alleyways" of labyrinth, giving it a dark mysterious mood. I love how this piece doesn't tell too much, it leaves so much room for ambiguity, and a sense of nostalgia. The author uses adjectives that really conjure up a sad, gentle, and romantic feel. The line 'depth of his weary soul' i found very emotive. The reader doesn't explain much plot, more just sets a mood, and leaves the reader with an image of a two characters drawn together. The author did a good job of creating subtext.


Shutter Island

Boss

Wow the expansive use of metaphor for the first sentence takes the reader right back the movie Shutter Island. "records always spinning round and round-" uses a symbol from the movie and is a great analogy of Laeddis' mental health. The only criticism I would have on this piece, and perhaps this is more personal preference, is that i find it so rich with imagery and analogy that i feel like i need to pull away from the text to take a breath and reflect of what is actually going on as oppose to reading it straight through. This kiss between Lester and Andrew towards the end is a surprising twist. I like how the author explores what is going on from Lester's Point of View.  

American Psycho

Patrick Bateman Anticipates Harry Potter

Very disturbing piece of fan fiction, but that is to be expected given the original material of American Psycho. Patrick Bateman waits in line for the new Harry Potter book. A goth girl questions his place in the line, angered by this Patrick drags her off and to a warehouse and brutally murders her, then returns home to read his Harry Potter. The use of first person point of view to create an unreliable narrator works well for this piece, as it gives direct insight as to what the character is thinking, as "Psycho" does with the use of voice over.  This piece is rather graphic and disturbing, but also at time comical, making it interesting to read, but i found the content too disturbing and graphic for my taste.

Scarface

Scarface Forever

Tony Montana goes to hell, where he eventually takes over the throne from the devil. This fan fiction is short and easy to read. The writer uses dialogue, and captures Tony accent with 'fuck you mein', an effective technique to demonstrate authenticity. There seems to be something lacking in this piece, I think it could padded out with description. For example, being set in Hell the author could of used a a lot more imagery to create a scary or haunting setting. I found this fanfic to be very average, the plot is boring. The writing is sufficient to portray the plot but lacks originality and imagery.

Psycho

We Didn't Start the Horror...

This is a song written to the tune of "We Didn't Start the Fire" by Billy Joel.

This song is an original and clever idea. The use of such an uplifting tune for the horror movie "Psycho", provides refreshingly dark humour. It explains much of the plot and shows an impressive use of rhythm and rhyme as well as symbology, which pays homage to a film so rich in symbols. Is is a creative idea.


Fight Club

Ben Taylor

In this piece of fan fiction the author directly address the reader, as the narrator does in the movie. He uses a dark and aggressive voice, encapsulating the mood of the movie narrators voice. He follows the idea the television invades our lives, forcing us to think about other peoples lives, and that we need to pull away from this to start living our own. He uses Ben Taylor as an example of this. The writer uses quite a few poetic techniques such as alliteration and anaphora. This gives the piece a rhythmic sense and build momentum.    I was also engaged by the use of 2nd person. I found the piece thought out and well written, there is a sense seems that the writer engaged themselves in writing this piece. 

Inception 

When Inception met Mean Girls

This fan fiction is really funny if you've seen Mean Girls, It seems more like Mean Girls meets Inception than the former. It uses a lot of dialogue and i think it would be beneficial if the piece had a little more description to establish who the characters are. The language used replicates Mean Girls, with words like 'whatever' and 'boo, you whore'. The dialogue is very similar to the movie, and could do with originality from the author.  The plot doesn't really resolve itself, so although is funny and enjoyable to read, it would be better if all tied in together. At times it is also confusing to know which character is speaking as it doesn't state who the conversations are between. This fan fiction is silly and for entertainment, maybe the author didn't think setting the scene and creating a variable plot is so important.